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Tre had an assignment in English class,, He has to turn this in tomorrow,, So No grade as yet,, We'll let you know what the teacher thinks of it, But Me?? I love it, Not bad for a 12 year old
Written By Tre' Tyree,, age 12 Kennedy Middle school



This Print turned out very small on here, I wonder why>>
Here is the poem in larger print for those like me that can't read it on the picture,

The Phoenix
I am the wrath of a fiery death
the spark of flame, the wisp of smoke
I am the signaler of all disasters
and Trump the sun in heated Battle
Tarnage and Death only
I Am NOT
But light and warmth are part of me as well
In your homes I sit on flaky logs and warm your family
At Night I am the one that illuminates the path you need to see that is covered with darkness
I Am the Everlasting Bird
The Ulimate Pyro
I am the Phoenix

Thanks for the 10 views on Tre's poem,,

He is 12???

I am "over 50" and I still have to write baby poems with very easy rhyming words.

Yep, I think that Tre` is taking afer his Granny, for sure.....

Diane, please tell Tre' that I am very proud of him. That's a wonderful poem!

You have a writer/poet in the works there Diane...a beautiful gift to have.

Great work Tre.

Thanks Everyone,,
He got an A
He explained the poem had to be picked from either , earth, wind , air, or fire. And must show the Good and the Bad and associate it with an animal whether real or fantasy. Teacher said His poem exhibits all three points of interest< with suggested emotion>, which is a PLUS!

Good for him!!
You must be proud!!!

This is very well done indeed and I am sorry I didn't see it sooner! (sometimes I am in and out of the forum too quickly!!)

*I think there is a small typo in your typed version, though, Diane* I believe the line should read "Carnage and Death only". (I used my magnifier to look at the colorful print more closely.)

Anyway, in my opinion Tre did a fantastic job on this, even without me knowing the demanding parameters the teacher set for the assignment. And now that I know the guidelines, I am even more impressed. Way to go, Tre!!

It will be very interesting to watch his talent develop as the years go by....

Terrific poem!

My beautiful high school burned down the year before I started there, and our theme for our graduating class was "the Phoenix, Risen from the Ashes", so I've always had an interest in all things connected with the phoenix.

I think it is great Tre' did a fantastic job proud of that A. Surely an apple off the tree.

The Teacher didn't notice it as I didn't, well IF she did she didn't mark off for misspelling, maybe she was just looking for the content of the assignment to be executed correctly as opposed to spelling?? ( I copied it exactly as he had written it ) so his handwritten one and his typed one on the phoenix picture paper must have been different?
Thanks for pointing that out,,
and thanks for the compliments everyone,,, Tre' said he appreciates it